For my first tok mini essay, obviously, I did not do sow well. Despite the fact that I was not able to perform well, I was able to discover some weakness in how I tackled this essay. First of all, I did not not read through my essay looking at the rubric, thus I believe that I was not able to obtain the top band marks. If i were to do a practice essay again, I would definitely consider looking at the mark scheme, and possibly make a peer check my work so that I will be able to get a better grade. I think that my bibliography was set poorly and in general, I believe that the structure of the essay was not very good.
If I were to do this essay again, considering mind maps and brainstorm may be useful since my ideas may ave been every were. In general, I believe I did a poor job on my essay, thus I am motivated for my next tok essay since i need to do a good job on my next one for next year. I will try my best next time!
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