January 2015 archive

‘Changing Minds: Changing Worlds – Language for emotional effect and change’

In this unit, we learned about ads and poems, and how pathos techniques help the texts become persuasive. In this unit, we had two summative assessments. The first one is a screencast which compares a poem and an ad. The screencast I made is here. The second one was to write a poem or to make an ad based on an issue that is a big problem in the world. I chose to write a poem about overfishing. This is the poem I wrote.

Our unit question was “What ‘moves’ me?” In this unit, I think I became better at using the persuasive techniques like simile, metaphor, alliteration, and rhyming. Also, I learned that making persuasive poems and ads are really hard. By doing the assessments, I learned that in some ways, poems can be more persuasive than ads and in the opposite ways in other times.

After the second assessment, which was to create our own persuasive text, I looked at my peers work. The text I really enjoyed looking at was Moe’s.

The issue she was addressing was about Deforestation. This is an important issue because when forests are cleared in the future, animals will lose their habitat and it can affect our lives because paper, wood, etc… are produced from forests.

The tone is serious, and the mood is fear. The techniques used in this poem are onomatopoeia, simile, alliteration, and rhyming. Onomatopoeia and simile helps us visualize the scene. For example, “Shatter shatter. The smoke rises” is a phrase from the poem. “Shatter shatter” is telling how the smoke is rising. Alliteration and Rhyming are techniques that emphasizes the verse/phrase. “Within minutes, the loving mother crumbled, as lifeless bodies piled” is also a phrase from the poem. The words ‘crumbled’ and ‘piled’ are rhyming and when we read it, the two words stand out more than the other words. Then, the other words in the same phrase will also come into our minds and it will be more easier to remember and understand.

These techniques will help tell the message in a more persuasive way because there are effects in each techniques that makes us think the issue is a very important issue occurring in the world. Which means that by using the techniques, the texts can be more effective and persuasive.